its me ttc, heres a list of errors for you (3e3)obviously. If you are not 3e3 please reference me Teck Chee (Editing & Error Finding) And Kelly (Essay)

“Neither, nor” Usage
Avoid having “Neither, nor” With Three Subjects or More

* As Agilan was neither born in Sri Lanka nor his father and grandfather was, The Ceylon Citizenship Act was unfair to Agilan

-> As Agilan, nor his father or his grandfather were born in Sri Lanka.

“Was” Usage
Avoid Using “Was” With A Verb

* In 1956, Sinhala was declared as the country’s official language under the Official Language Act.

-> In 1956, the Official Language Act declared Sinhala as the national language

* Tamils in the government service had to learn Sinhala within three years. If they did not, they would be dismissed.

-> Tamils in the government service had to learn Sinhala within three years. If they failed to comply, dismissal was imminent.

* Agilan’s brother, Amalan, was in the government sector. He was furious when Sinhala was declared as the country’s National Language.

-> Agilan’s brother, Amalan, was in the government sector. He was furious when Sinhala became the country’s National Language.

Derived Terms – Improper Noun Usage
Use the Correct Term

* They had lived and contributed significantly to the Sri Lanka economy but were denied basic rights such as voting.

->They had lived and contributed significantly to the Sri Lankan economy but were denied basic rights such as voting.






“Be” Usage
Avoid using “Be” With a Verb

* The Official Language Act upset them as well as the others because it was difficult to find jobs or be promoted.

-> The Official Language Act upset Agilan as well as the other Tamil Indians as it was difficult to find jobs or rise up the ladder.

““Lingering” Error” Type 1
You edit the second error and miss the first – What a Pity

* The Official Language Act upset them as well as the others because it was difficult to find jobs or be promoted.

-> The Official Language Act upset Agilan as well as the other Tamil Indians as it was difficult to find jobs or rise up the ladder.

Repeated Usage – “Why you use again?”
Chance to Widen Vocabulary Usage

*“Agilan, it isn’t fair right? We contributed significantly to the Sri Lankan economy and this is how they treat us! Come, come with me, our leader, Chelvanayakam, is leading some of us to do a peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act in the afternoon,” exclaimed Amalan, fixing his gaze on Agilan.

->“Agilan, it isn’t fair right? We contributed considerably to the Sri Lankan economy and this is how they treat us! Come, come with me, our leader, Chelvanayakam, is leading some of us to do a peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act in the afternoon,” exclaimed Amalan, fixing his gaze on Agilan.







Better Punctuation – “How dare you?” to “How dare you!”
Show your Indignation etc.

*“Agilan, it isn’t fair right? We contributed considerably to the Sri Lankan economy and this is how they treat us! Come, come with me, our leader, Chelvanayakam, is leading some of us to do a peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act in the afternoon,” exclaimed Amalan, fixing his gaze on Agilan.

->“Agilan, it isn’t fair right? We contributed considerably to the Sri Lankan economy and this is how they treat us? Come, come with me, our leader, Chelvanayakam, is leading some of us to do a peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act in the afternoon,” exclaimed Amalan, fixing his gaze on Agilan.

“But” Usage – “But here but there”
Drop “but(s)” or comma if Next to a “never”

*But never did he expect that it was the last time he would have seen his brother.

-> But, never did he expect that it was the last time he would have seen his brother.

-> Never did he expect that it was the last time he would have seen his brother.

“And” Usage – “And, and What?”
Mrs Angela Lee (CBSS), she told you [strikethrough] so [/strikethrough]

*“Agilan, the peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act was disrupted by supporters of the Sinhala Language. It turned violent and over a hundred people were killed and your brother was one of them,” gasped Gunalan, who was Amalan’s colleague.

->“Agilan, the peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act was disrupted by supporters of the Sinhala Language. Over a hundred people were killed, your brother was one of them,” gasped Gunalan, who was Amalan’s colleague.







The Dangerous Commas Dilemma – “Woo Scary”
*Attention Error Here* Check Your Work * Define ‘It’ *

*“Agilan, the peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act was disrupted by supporters of the Sinhala Language. It turned violent and over a hundred people were killed and your brother was one of them,” gasped Gunalan, who was Amalan’s colleague.

** “Agilan, the peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act was disrupted by supporters of the Sinhala Language. It turned violent, over a hundred people were killed, your brother was one of them,” gasped Gunalan, who was Amalan’s colleague.

- Did “It” turn violent?
- Did “Your brother” turn violent?
- Can be confusing to readers

->“Agilan, the peaceful demonstration against the Official Language Act was disrupted by supporters of the Sinhala Language. Over a hundred people were killed, your brother was one of them,” gasped Gunalan, who was Amalan’s colleague.

Legend
* Sentence with Error
** Sentence with Error 2
-> Corrected Sentence


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